Hey….How’s it goin’? I’m the new Smackdown promo grader. So why don’t you hit the showers and pick up that bar of soap?
Bad start. I’m sorry. Okay, here we go.
Not one mention of DESTINY or perros. 0/5. Better luck next week man.
Nah I’m just playin’
The Positives:-I loved that you played on Dorito’s wealth, because he doesn’t even do that on TV anymore. I really hope this continues.
- Backstage promo props. Things happened in your promo. Dorito walked around, talked to different people. When I read it, I could easily follow what was going on and picture it in my head as if I were watching it.
-Character Authenticity. Yep that sounds like Del Rio alright. Well, actually this "promo Del Rio" has more personality than actual Del Rio so there’s that. I like the heel talk, the bullying, the pauses between phrases, (He does that all the time on TV it drives me nuts. I can’t imagine him reading a book out loud because he would pause for 20 seconds between sentences like a goof ass) the money, it was all great.
The Negatives:Any problems had nothing to do with the content. Only problem was the color coding. When you use a side character, it would be a little easier to follow if his text was a different color. Other than that, you’re golden.
Suggestions:-Whether you want him or not, your order of Doritos comes with a side order of Ricardo Rodriguez. I would love to see you use him in future promos as either comic relief, or being bullied by someone. Hell, you could let other people in the fed use RR in their promos against you as ways of raising the stakes. Admins are allowing managers to be controlled by AI in Age Two, something you might want to consider in actual matches
-As the first promo of Age Two, and due to the fact that we haven’t had matches yet I can’t blame you for not doing this, but I would like to see Del Rio start some shit. Maybe week two or three, go call out someone. I am excited to see rivalries, stories, and feuds start up and it’s generally the heels that have to ignite the flame. Smackdown roster is pretty heel heavy, but with promos like this, I see Berty standing out.
So the verdict? I’ll do it MSD Streets style with the fancy brackets.
{Official Grade}
5/5 Awesome promo to start Age Two man. Not going to dock points for one color formatting error, unless it becomes a trend. I want this promo to be an example to our other fed members as to what kind of content we want to see here. Your purpose was clear, it was interesting, fun, and most of all creative and different. There was also clear formatting (you use a different style than the blueprint, but it works) and near flawless grammar. Once again, great, great job.
(This will be the way I grade everybody’s promos. If you have any suggestions or criticisms on my grading style please let me know! I also take bribes.)
take my contextual insults in stride bucko! 