Tyler
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 | | Subject: The fire relights part 2. 11/17/2012, 4:50 pm | |
| Televisions Everywhere.....The dark room as before. The camera this time, is close up to the match.  The screen cuts to a view of the World Title triple threat match featured on WcW months ago.  Static, then back to the match in the room. The camera is slolwy backing out. Static then another picture from the match.  Edge goes darting across the ring and spears the big red machine to the ground and covers. Static, then back to the original dark room with the match in it. Now in the view, is a glove holding the match. Static.  Static, then back to the room. Now backing out onto a figure standing in the room, holding the match a little away from it's head, only barley able to be made out. The screen starts jumping from image to image.    The final image stays there longer than all the others. Suddenly, it starts to burn. From to inside out. Engulfing CM Punk's face then the entire image. A deep laugh sounds out as words appear in fire on the screen. "I will have what is righfully mine."The screen goes to static but flashes a quick photo before it dies out completely, sending the viewers into a cheer, and some a boo.  Then, darkness. | |
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Heath Slater
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| | Subject: Re: The fire relights part 2. 11/19/2012, 7:07 pm | |
| Another interesting promo from you. As I was reading it, I could clearly picture it in my head as if it were really on T.V. The visual aids were used appropriately and enhanced the quality of the promo significantly. Formatting and grammar were top notch.
My only suggestion if you make another Kane promo next week would be to continue to vary it up. Once we are well into Age Two, promos will be much more easy to do with a person to feud with.
{Offical Grade}
4/5. Well done man. You hit the criteria and took my criticisms from your last promo to heart and I can see the improvement. | |
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