Here we go!
Positives:
-It was amazing. This promo is better than anything WWE has done with Ryback.
-You gave him a background, a story. He is a three dimensional character with depth unlike the Ryback we see on TV.
-You had Ryback doing stuff. Apparently he lives in a creepy meat locker and assaults camera men. It is original and interesting.
-It was funny. You showed he Hungry Man dinner picture and then had pay off later when you had him rip the box open and eat it. I mean he didn't even cook it! It was still frozen in that creepy meat locker and he still ate it. That's tough right there.
-Formatting was great and the use of visuals were appropriate and made the promo better.
Only problems are with the grammar. You are a strange man when it comes to grammar in your promos my friend. Some paragraphs are perfect with capitalization, commas, periods, apostrophes, etc. and then others are just blocks of lowercase words separated by periods. It just makes it harder for the reader to engage with the promo when there are lots of technical errors.
{Official Grade}
5/5 Going to go against my own criteria and still give you a 5/5 on this one. The content is just too good and I want this to serve as an example to others of what a great promo is like. Your Orton promos were good, but this is just WAY better than those were. Truly great work man, I can't wait to see what you do next.
